The Unraveling (New 11/23)

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Hi everybody

I wanted to take a moment and thank you all for the support on this story! For a few different reasons, I have decided to take a break from writing. I’m not sure if or when I will be back.

For those of you who have been friendly and left kind comments, thank you. It truly has meant the world to me. Thanks for the support and for taking time out of your day to read my story!

All the best,
-Emily

This is incredibly sad news, but I understand the need to take a step back sometimes.

This story has been such a pleasure to read. Literally every chapter is absolutely astonishing and I've loved every second of it. I choose to believe that you'll be back soon to continue writing what is the best erotic story ever written imo, and in fact I'm confident that you'll come back refreshed and better than ever,  ready to give us many more amazing chapters to this breathtaking story!

I'll leave you my reviews for the latest two chapters nonetheless.

In the meantime, until your triumphant return, take care, Emily, and all the best! ❤

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So these reviews might feel a bit more sombre for obvious reasons, but if these are the last reviews for this masterpiece, I'll try to make it count


Chapter 44 review

I love how this chapter starts off with such timidity from Riley.

The girls further degrading Riley with their crude remarks about oral sex was a fun touch, and really highlights just how true it is - as the title states, we well and truly have witnessed a real Unraveling of poor Riley.

"The moon cast long shadows across the ground, painting the world in a monochrome palette of grays and blacks. The air smelled faintly of damp earth and distant rain, a stark contrast to the sterile dormitory corridors"

It's so nice to read such well articulated descriptions of what Riley is feeling, seeing and experiencing. Simple yet really effective writing.

Really enjoyed Riley standing in such a public place in just her underwear. Underwear that is doing a poor job of concealing her modesty, with her nipples poking through her bra and her wet panties.

"Her panties were the last to go. She hooked her thumbs into the elastic band and pushed them down, feeling the fabric glide over her swollen labia. Finally, she stepped out of them, and they dropped to the ground, leaving her completely bare. The light from the streetlamp cast a soft glow on her pussy, highlighting the soft folds of her inner lips and the plump mound of her mons. Her clit was a tiny pearl nestled in the crevice, and she felt a jolt of arousal as the cool air hit it"

Wow, now this was a sexy read! Loved that.

Riley standing there naked, being scolded for something that's not even her fault and once again acting timid is fun and humiliates her even more. And Holy moly, that puniment is so unexpected and such fun!

I LOVE where this website punishment is going! I also equally love her response!

"With a trembling voice, she spoke up. “I-I’ll do anything. Anything but that. Please, I’m begging you, just tell me what to do instead!”

Yup. Definitely a big fan of that. Begging is so much fun.

WOW! Wow, Wow, Wow! EVERY second of the outdoor photo shoot is absolutely sensational! Stunningly hot! Phenomenally sexy as hell! Let's add one more WOW into the mix. I also love how Riley is forced to look at her own gratuitous pictures! The "ass up" shot so nice.

Loved this:

"The folds of her sex were like a secret garden, begging to be explored, and her clit was a tiny jewel at the top of it all, a sensitive button that had been denied release for so long it was practically pulsing with need"

Seriously, this photo shoot keeps getting hotter and hotter with each passing paragraph!  She has to spread herself open now, but she's too wet which results in slippage? Extraordinary! And spreading her ass, with her wetness dropping onto the table was the ludicrously beautiful cherry on top! But wait - there's more! Ellie fingers Riley's ass too! Love it!

"She felt the tension in her shoulders ease, the knots of fear and excitement slowly unraveling as the water cascaded over her breasts and belly"

I always enjoy when the title is implemented into the story in some way lol.

I love how in the shower, Riley got so close to climax, yet was obedient enough to stop. No one was watching her and she could have broken her rule, but she stopped herself anyway. A very subservient girl indeed!

Overall an absolutely remarkable, sensational, hot, hot chapter! My word that was outstanding! It was a longer chapter too which was really nice.

[Bucket]

Chapter 45 review

I've been very much anticipating that art class for a while now, so this should be tremendous fun!

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So we're just straight away starting with a hot Riley masturbation scene, legs wide open huh? Very nice opening.

Love the description of Riley so desperate for an orgasm, yet she knows there's simply no breaking her rule allowed. It's vividly detailed so well, and you can feel her desperation. I also surprisingly really enjoyed Riley applying makeup to sort of perk herself up and make herself look pretty.

The build up from leaving her room and the art class is wonderfully handled. You can really feel Riley's anxiety building with each passing moment. Really enjoyed that. You can definitely feel she's really, really not up for this at all.

As I read on, more and more tension building, and it's weird. Nothing particularly erotic is happening, yet the build up itself is actually very exciting and erotic in its own way. Once the eventual nudity occurs, wow. All of a sudden, the art instructor describing each of Riley's curves, dips and crevices is hugely alluring.

And the HOLY SHITE! James has to wipe Riley's wetness off her thighs? Incredible! Love that! Absolutely brilliant! I was hoping to see something akin to that, so definitely loved to see that. The teacher scolding her for her arousal making it even more mortifying for her, more fun for us.

The first pose was fun, but immediately the second pose is extremely sexy, and the growing arousal between Riley's legs makes it so much better. I really enjoyed the unintentional bending over and giving the class a lovely view.

The masturbation scene was ridiculously erotic! The slow, gentle circles paints a very clear and sexy picture of what Riley's doing, and it's really very pleasant to read, and it just keeps getting better! Her rocking her hips in sync with your movements, her orgasm building, only for her to deny herself at the last minute despite her climax fighting back saying "you need this" all just so glorious and wonderful to read!

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These latest two chapters have been both an absolute joy to read, as well as really quite sad. I've loved every second of every chapter. Literally the entirety of this beautiful story is a masterpiece. Yet throughout both chapters, my mind kept going back to this potentially being the end... Still, I really loved these chapters a great deal, and the website photo shoot was insanely arousing and masterfully written.

Again, I choose to believe you'll be back soon to do what you do best and that this story will continue with many, many more sensational chapters.

Profoundly erotic, impeccably written and an overall awe-inspiring, jaw dropping story!

Thanks, Emily, and we'll hopefully see you back soon! ☺

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Thanks, Emily, have a great break and come back rested and I know you will knock the rest of the story out of the park.