Chapter 35 review
Once again you give us more of the Riley/Lily bond, and I really love the comment " You're beautiful, just the way you are". I was hoping for a "You think I'm beautiful?" from Riley, followed by her getting all flustered/blushing, but no worries whatsoever. Everything has been handled so unbelievely well so far.
And then there's the butt stuff.
I've been meaning to suggest you start giving us more "backdoor fun". It'd really, very much add even more fun and excitement, but then you go ahead and give us exactly that! Extraordinary! Literally everything about was brilliant!
The only reason I didn't mention it is because I leave so many comments, I almost feel like I'm being overbearing or obnoxiously enthusiastic. If I am, just let me know and I'll tone it down a notch or two lol.
Anyway, the insertion scene and everything that ensues from there is ridiculously hot. (See what I did there? Ice. Hot... No? I'll stop) The ice cube falling out of Lily was not only fun, but actually quite humorous.
Riley announcing that she's done and the girls say to her "prove it" is outrageously erotic! More of that kind of thing please! And then Ellie fingering Riley's anus? My word that's staggeringly hot as hell!
I know I've been harping on about Riley baring the vast brunt of the embarrassment, nudity and submission, (and I definitely stand by that) but I know that it was Darky's birthday wish to have Lily lose just once, so who am I to object to a birthday wish. No worries there.
* Future me here - At this point, I've now read the rest of the chapter, so I know what happens next, but instead of removing this next part, I'm going to leave it here, as it may give you a few ideas for a future chapter. I really like the following idea:
May I suggest involving Riley in Lily's punishment in some way? Riley has been edged into oblivion and back. Perhaps whatever the erotic punishment is, and because Riley is so monstrously, ravenously horny that a butterfly landing on her arm would just about be enough to set her off, she spontaneously cums so ludicrously hard in front of everyone without even being touched/minimal contact to all of the girls utter astonishment to the point where their jaws drop, just by the mere act of witnessing, or perhaps being involved in Lily's punishment.
You could do it so that Riley is so incredibly close to the edge that the moment that there's any sort of skin contact with Lily, even if it's merely chest to chest, front to front or even simply something like eye contact with Lily, she immediately knows she's in trouble and starts shaking and breathing erratically. She's trying DESPERATELY to suppress the incoming orgasm, but the more she tries, the more she trembles and her breathing is at a point where she's either going to have a panic attack or an enormous orgasm. Lily and the girls begin to notice.
Once she realises that it's too late, about half a second before climaxes, she draws in a deep, sharp gasp and squeals out a high pitch "OH MY GOD, PLEASE CAN I..." but before she can finish the sentence, the earthquake of an orgasm hits, leaving her audience completely speechless. Riley is then so deeply embarrassed that she just wants the ground to eat her up.
That also acts as a double whammy, as Riley didn't have permission to cum, so she therefore also has to be punished.
Just a suggestion.
* I wrote that before reading what Lily's punishment was, but yeah, just keeping it here so that perhaps it can be of some use. Obviously Lily has already been punished, so instead of Riley cumming during Lily's punishment, it could be used in another scene if you so choose to use any of this. Perhaps whilst they make out in front of the girls/an audience, or even in public with the most innocent of skin contact with Lily.
Speaking of Lily's punishment, I actually really enjoyed it. It was very well done, and Riley was still completely naked, so there was still a heavy emphasis on Riley's embarrassment and nudity as well, even during Lily's punishment. Excellently executed.
Overall, I freaking LOVE the new chapters! Everything about it is extraordinary!
I know I mentioned in an earlier post about a potential Riley OnlyFans page that you don't necessarily want the girls to cross the line with their cruelty, but I mean that in the sense that posting extremely lewd pictures of her without her consent would be a huge violation. Not of trust, although there is that too, but she would physically feel violated. (Again though, I love the idea and definitely think you can make it work so long as you find the right balance. Would be loads of fun if done well, and I absolutely trust you to do it impeccably)
In terms of cruelty when it comes to sexual/kinky torment, definitely keep that coming as much as possible as you have been. It'd be near impossible to make them too cruel in that regard whilst still having an underlying bit of care for Riley, unless they forced her to have sex with a guy of course. That'd be too much imo)
Lastly, just to reiterate, definitely don't want shorter chapters. Apologies for the confusion. The length of the chapters are perfect as is if it means we continue to get a constant stream of updates like you've been giving us. Of course longer chapters would be amazing, but I know you're not a machine, so it's better to get chapters more often than longer chapters but not as regularly.
Everything you're doing is perfect, so just keep doing what you do. You've written perfection, a I hope there are another hundred chapters or more to come lol!
So yeah, thank you again for this masterpiece, and I am, and I'm sure we all are so damn greatful for fast uploads of new chapters! Especially for me, waiting for 3 new chapters at a time before I read It, it means the wait for 3 chapters isn't particularly excruciating.
So very much appreciated! ❤
(Never mind, ignore this. It initially seemed like they were already out of the pool)
