Sharing a Changing Cubicle at the Pool (Part 9 - 5 Feb)

[NudeBaG]

Even if someone’s speculation/prediction is close or even dead on to what you have planned, you should have the confidence in yourself to deliver at that point.
That’s just my opinion though.
I’ve seen first hand on here how subversion of expectations can kill a great story.
Go with your gut though.
You ARE an amazing writer, and I have faith you can work with anything.
You have masterfully maintained the tease to perfection, and I fully believe the payoff will be epic.
As I’ve stated, your implementation of the time limit was a fantastic tool.
There’s only so much more that CAN happen within that time limit.
The fact that every chapter has left me wanting more is a testament to your writing.
All I’m saying is, as long as you maintain the quality you’ve delivered so far, all you have to do is put the last few pieces in place, then step back and admire the picture

And I’m sorry if I’ve put unnecessary pressure on you, but this story really IS incredible and IS my current favorite

[Summers]

I understand the comment about having people suggest something close to what you had planned.

It may not be logical, but there is a part of you that thinks about whether that person would think you did it because of their suggestion, and i would imagine, when it is in the open, like the comments on this forum, it would be worse, as others might think the same.

Not a massive thing, but definitely something that can cross your mind.

Kind of glad, when i posted on Nifty, that all comments and feeback was emails. i am not sure if a live and public comment section, would have been a good thing or not for me at the time.

I actually tend to not comment much myself on stories, in case it comes across as trying to take over the story, or if i suggest something already in the works, plus, i ramble, and often confuse myself with the point i am trying to make

[NudeBaG]

Another aspect of this story in particular that tends to get overlooked a lot in these kinds of stories is your depiction of relationships between characters.

Like, I know it’s an ENM story, and Cam IS a bit careless (in more ways than one) AND I DESPERATELY want him to be further embarrassed in front of the girls, but I also ‘kind of’ hope Ellie, Hannah and Mia are a bit surprised
Like, the budding relationship with Ellie has been masterfully crafted in a short time.
She CLEARLY cares for him, and given any other set of circumstances, this could be just a normal day at the pool where their budding relationship evolves and they get closer.

But now, thanks to jealousy, hormones, sibling rivalry, classmate rivalry, revenge and every other conflict that comes at that age, Cam has lived up to Hannah and Mia’s view of him as ‘a stupid boy’.
Even when given the chance to make it up to Ellie, he couldn’t do something that (may have) endeared him to her further.
Now, it seems he’ll be exposed to her WITHOUT the safety net of compassion that was there before.
Again, masterfully crafted relationships in a very short time.

I rambled a bit there, but my point was to further praise your writing abilities

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