itty bitty titties -advice needed

[EddieDavidson]

This is sort of a rough draft/idea. I am not sure that I want to continue with this story, or write it in third person narrative like this. I may want to tell it from one of the character's POV.
It's based loosely on a youtube video I just watched.

https://youtu.be/CagX7MOLERI?si=KcgdR6Mqj_Ml70a2
(no nudity, but obviously PG-13+)

Taylor's dad stood with his arms crossed, looking at his daughter, Taylor, with a stern expression. She just walked in with her shopping bag. The caption on the bag read "Talk Nerdy to Me". She was wearing a comfortable blouse and tight stretchy pants, like most girls her age did.

“Forty minutes late, and you didn’t even give me a call,” he began, his voice steady but frustrated.

Taylor shifted uncomfortably. “I called your phone three times,” she responded, trying to defend herself.

“That does not prevent you from calling me,” he retorted sharply. “We paid for that phone. I got you a charger for the car, a charger for the house, everything you needed. You wanted unlimited mileage, minutes—everything for that phone. The whole purpose was for me to be able to reach you!”

Taylor smiled nervously, but her father’s face hardened. “You better lose that smile,” he warned, his voice lowering. “You know what? I’m gonna help you lose that smile.”

His tone left no room for argument. “Get your butt out to the shed, and you get undressed. I’ll be right out there,” he finished, turning away, leaving no doubt that the conversation was over.

Her little brother was outside mowing the grass. He snickered when he saw his older sister walking out of the house in a huff. He knew there was only one reason Taylor was going to the shed, and that his sister would soon have a sore ass and an even bigger scowl on her face.

"Stop watching, creeper!" she chastised him for rubbing it in - even though Peter hadn't said a word.

"Peter, didn't say anything to you, and Peter is outside doing chores to help around here. I think you owe Peter an apology," Taylor's father said from behind her while she froze in place and cringed.

She pursed her lips and offered an insincere apology through her gritted teeth to Peter.

"Sounds like you want an audience for this spanking, Taylor!"

"No, Daddy! That's gross!"

"you had a choice. You could apologize to Peter like a normal person, but you chose to show your ass out here by being a brat. Spanking you alone in the shed hasn't born any fruit, and now that you are older, I'd prefer Peter be a witness so that you won't make up some story to your mom about inappropriate touching!"

"Daddy, I would never!"

"I don't know what you are capable of Taylor! and frankly, I think the pain of a bare-handed spanking isn't going to put the fear in you. You obviously don't want your little brother to see the crack of your little ass get tanned, so I think that's going to ensure you take the time to call me or your mom if you are going to be late."

"Dad! no way!"

"You are under the opinion that this is a negotiation, Taylor. It isn't. Get in that shed, get those bottoms completely down around your ankles, bend over and wait for me, while I talk to Peter."

Fuming, Taylor stormed off to the shed to obey her father's instruction.

"Okay, Buddy! You don't actually have to go in there and watch your sister. I kind of got carried away because your sister likes to push my buttons and poke the bear. I don't know if you'd even be comfortable watching," he said to his son after Taylor was out of earshot.

Would anyone have some ideas/twists they would like to suggest/brainstorm with me?

[Hooked6]

Great start. I do hope you continue. Lots of possibilities.

Hooked6

[student]

How much as Taylor upset her mother? Father is really irritated by the cumulative series of insults Taylor has inflicted on him, the brother is bothered enough that there's no sympathy, and it is unlikely that Mother wasn't unaffected. If Mother takes Taylor's side and Father is outraged enough, Mother will share her daughter's punishments.

Is there more to this family? Just mother, father, brother and Taylor? How close are the neighbors? Far enough away, it appears, that nobody objects to yelps from the shed.

Taylor didn't become a brat overnight. She isn't going to change for just a one-off spanking. To fit in with ENF, there is going to have to be one or more embarrassed naked females, of course, but it is going to take more than a single session. Perhaps if this story universe had legal extended female nudity and Taylor was voluntold into that program this story could be kept short and have a satisfying ending. One school of thought is that misbehavior is a cry to be noticed, to be the center of attention.

[Freesub]

Peter has to find a way to convince his father to watch the spanking of course!
I think it would be interesting if Taylor misbehaves incrementally, exposing her bare butt, then maybe her breasts and finally her pussy to her brother.

[jimmythehand]

An enjoyable first chapter; looking forward to the continuation.

Would anyone have some ideas/twists they would like to suggest/brainstorm with me?

Given the title of the story, I assume her breast size will come up at some point. My own preferences around that would run to her being exposed as having been stuffing/padding her bras, unbeknownst to anyone else up to that point, which would be a source of great embarrassment to her and something she's desperate to keep secret.

I'd personally prefer to stay away from any enforced nudity laws/programmes for this one, only because we've had a lot of that in stories recently and it's not something that's been mentioned as existing in this story's universe so far. That's not to say I'll stop reading if you do go in that direction - I'm sure it will be good either way.

[mars357]

Maybe she turns out to be a real cry baby who can't take a more serious spanking. Will agree to humiliation (naked lawn mowing or gardening) instead?

[EddieDavidson]

These are good ideas! I have another story I am going to finish first, but I can use more brainstorming.

I think I'll start with the mom, not the father as the punisher, and it is because she is stuffing her bra. That's a brilliant way to do this.

"You want to show off tits that you don't have? you want the neighbors to think you have big boobies? Okay, stand topless in the window, press those little puffy nubs to the glass, and let everybody see what you REALLY have..."

"MAW-AWWWMM!!"

"You want me to make you take down your shorts too?"

"But...But...But!"

"Fine, shorts down, you can show your butt off to your dad and brother, while I make dinner...anytime you tell me But from now on, shorts on the ground, little girl!"

[EddieDavidson]

I am not sure if this is oaky, but as I near the end of the Foal story, i am already thinking about my next project.

I could use reader feedback and brainstorming/sound board. is that okay?

What I know: I want a traditional/back to basics "ENF" story - very plausible, very real feeling. It focuses primarily on Embaressed nude female.

Let me first go into my criteria. You could throw out a million cool ideas, but if you don't know what I am trying for, it won't matter.

I often venture into themes of dominance and submission in my stories, which seems to scare off readers here. I am willing to try to keep that out, but I enjoy that. The reason is that I like to write "Predicament" stories.

Hooked6 is the classic example of this. He sets a predicament like a girl has her clothes blown off during a storm, and has to find a way home. The predicament is the interesting part in this girl's life that is worthy of a story. It's not an ongoing situation, so when it is over, the story is over.

However, what I enjoy is writing longer stories about characters evolving - the predicaments are there for them to overcome, or even accept and evolve with.

Another great example is Vulgus. if you have read his writing. He might introduce a situation with a wicked stepmother, in a classic sort of Cinderella story, and while the husband is away, the stepmom and her stepdaughter bring out the leather strap and humiliate the main character in the living room, make her stand in the window naked with her titties pressed to the panes, and these predicaments are eventually overcome when Dad comes home, finds out and does the same to step mom and step daughter but worse.

This sometimes triggers people, because it can be seen as "abuse" and if it were real - sure, it would be. Just like Stephen King writing about a classic car coming back to life to seek vengeance against a nerd's bullies; just because you read or write stories like that, it doesn't mean you advocate a car running down the assholes at your school with a mind of it's own.

It just means you enjoy a good story, and sometimes it's fun to live vicarious through a situation like that, especially when there is a "Burn the Bitch" theme, where justice gets served at the end. Indiana Jones has to get beat up, run over by boulders, and fall off cliffs in movies, so that he has something to overcome, to eventually triumph.

I say all that, because it colors what makes a good story to me. I need a lengthy story with meat to it, so that I can fall in love with the characters, and I need a predicament. The old Snidely Whiplash cartoons where he tied Pollyanna to the track is a classic example. It is implausible - why would he do that? it's murder. What could he possibly really gain?

The storytellers set up a predicament, precisely for Dudley Do-good to come to her rescue, that's the fun of the predicament, the fear that bad things may happen, but not that it actually happens. So for me, a lot of "ENF" is about streaking down the street at night, dashing behind trash cans and bushes and HOPING not to get caught. The tension is sneaking - so I also have to have characters who are blithely unaware, or who may be neighbors that catch them in the act and those reactions are priceless to me.

For an ENF to be fun for me to write, It can't just be "Humiliation Club" and it's six teen girls all in a tree house painting naughty words on each other's asses, and hazing each other, where nobody every finds out.

It has to be where, they dare each other to go to class or to dinner that way with it under their skirt and no panties, there has to be the CHANCE to get caught, and possibly exposure. That's what to me, is a classic ENF story. They don't actually have to be discovered though.

So, I've had this idea above, and I like the idea of making the villain the mom. However, I also don't just want to write about an irrideemable hag who bullies her kids. That's not going to work.

So one of three things needs to happen with that theme:

1. The mother is actually a decent person, perhaps strict and oppressed, and the daughter(s) are flawed to where they are slutty/and so when Mom sends them to get spanked in the woodshed, it's with the intention that just taking the TV away is not enough. She needs a more radical solution and when that does not work, it snowballs. She delivers an ultimatum and the daughters call her on it. What is she to do? if she backs down (the predicament) they will walk all over her.

A great example of this, is a story I've always admired. I didn't write it and I can't find it on SOL, but it was called "Pinch Week"

In this story, Lindsay the older blonde humiliates her little brother. She's always teased him, but recently she got him to believe this girl was interested in him, and when he had his pants around his ankles or something, they burst in and snapped pictures - something like that.

The dad gives her a choice: She can either spend a month letting him get even AND still go to University, or she will immediately have to move out and start working at Waffle Hut. Lindsay was about to start college.

The setup was more plausible than my simple explanation, but the general premise was that the revenge took the form of him being able to "pinch" the crap out of Lindsay's bare ass, and so she had to walk around bottomless. It had no BDSM really, but it was always implied that the parents were into it. This came in the form of a chair that he found in the garage, designed like one for a baby, except for an adult, that would force Lindsay's legs in stirrups, and present her butt through the back of the chair, and she had to eat her meals like that.

The author wrote the dad out of the story (unsure why) but the mom continued to give him ideas, including popping the snotty daughter with an air rifle, and even took them camping, when the main character's friend and his older sister (who was Lindsay's rival) got in on it.

The mother recognized in Lindsay she was a brat, and took some pleasure indirectly seeing justice done, and that's why I say she wasn't this monsterous person who was yelling and being unreasonable. She was quite pleasent.

I could definitely write something along those lines, but would never want to simply copy the idea. I am open to thoughts there. I do have one story I need to finish, where I set something up like that, but it's a really long build of the female cousin taking out her frustrations on the main character.

I've never finished that story, it's located here;
https://storiesonline.net/s/23522/visiting-aunt-scarlet

I used Scarlet Johansen as the model for the Aunt, who is a very well-adjusted and happy woman who is also a nudist, and works out of her home as a prostitute. The main character's mother (who is a snob/prude) moves in due to circumstances outside of her control, and somehow gets roped into doing it after a particular customer finds her attractive and makes her an offer that's difficult to refuse. I could probably work that idea above into it, but I really think it would be more fun to start with the crimes already committed, and just begin with the vengeance if I go that route.


2.

One of my recurring themes, has been siblings who dare each other to do things, and we discover that one character is actually a glutton for punishment and just likes doing what she is told to do. When the other sibling realizes this, she says "So, what you..don't want to give me dares?""

"no."

"But, you want ME to give you dares?"

"Yes, but like I can't refuse them"

"So, basically, I can tell you what to do?"

"I guess so. I kind of like that, yes."

And then this would sort of dovetail into them making a game of seeing what they can get away with in front of other siblings, and the parents, and even getting the submissive main character into trouble/so she will be spanked etc.

I have a rough draft of something like that now, but I never went anywhere with it.

A variation is A more classic ENF, about a weird girl who just likes doing weird things, like one day she decides to wear extremely long socks, and tennis shoes and run the length of street in front of her house at 4am nude.

3.

A more classic ENF, I think would be simply about a high school kid who is just trying to play video games and do whatever, and he has to babysit his cousins, and maybe they have itty bitty titties, but they like doing things that are naughty, without overtly so - as an example, I used to know a girl who could fit her entire hand in her mouth and she'd walk around like that at the mall sometimes. I don't think she was ever truly aware at the time that we were imagining our dicks down her throat.

She was up for anything for a laugh/dare, and so these girls like to run around topless, and the main character's primary goal might be keeping this from his parents, because if they found out he is ogling his cousins, he feels he'd be in trouble. At the same time, boobs. So, he likes seeing those, even itty bitty ones.

I could think of a lot of scenarios, from my own childhood that I wrote into Keeping the babysitter in line, pep rallies with cheerleaders getting caught sucking dick under the bleachers by a bunch of boys watching without her realizing, skinny dipping with cousins, that sort of thing - coming of age type story. However, what I am looking for in option three is a framework that feels not only plausible and relatable, but sets him up to be an "Accidental Voyuer". He gets to participate, but he did not instigate that.

another good example, is the neighbor MILF likes to sunbathe nude (with her teen daughter), and he likes to peep, and she is aware.

"Hey Michael, is that you?" she says, while sunbathing naked in her backyard. Ass is glistening with coconut oil, on a hot Florida sunny day.

(OH GOD!) his body shakes to the core when he realizes she knew he was there.

"Um, yeah...?" he says from behind the fence, realizing he is caught red-handed looking through the eye hole in the fence.

"Listen, would you mind mowing our grass? I can pay you twenty dollars, and we have a mower. I know it's a lot to ask but it's really overdue and my husband and son won't be back this weekend. It would really be doing us a solid."


I am open to suggestions, if you have a dream scenario like that, and don't mind if I take poetic license then post it up. No ghosts, or fairies, aliens, time travel, stuff. I can't do science fiction, and nothing NIS - I need to take a break from elaborate stories about Gladiator Brothels, and Nude in School programs, and such. I want to get back to the basics.

[Hooked6]

I am honored that you cited my work here. Having well-established authors as yourself appreciate your work makes doing our craft all the more rewarding. Thank you.

Earlier in this thread, you asked whether 3rd person or narrative style would be better than a First person narrative, I personally LOVE the first person viewpoint of the protagonist's experience. You get all the emotions, fear, the internal thoughts of the protagonist that way. The reader gets a front row seat to all the emotion and reactions. Third person seems rather dry and wrote sometimes though you clearly have a talent in writing both.

I loved some of the ideas expressed by you and the others listed above. A good old-fashioned story with a great premise is always a most entertaining read.

I hope you continue with this story as I count it as one of my favorites. Either way you decide I am sure it will be entertaining!

Hooked6

[EddieDavidson]

Thank you! You were an inspiration for me to start writing. I read everything on your site (several times).

I ran out of things to read. I realized that I should go ahead and just write the stories that I would like to read, and maybe I would inspire people to write the same and then I'd have something new.

It has worked in a limited capacity.

Are you actively working on the Antebellum School Project? How is that going?

If you have a premise/central idea that may work for the parameters above, I'd love to hear it. I have a ton of half-finished stories that I've thought about posting here, but I don't like to leave people hanging if I don't finish the story for a while. They just languish unread and unloved on my hard drive.

I have one where the family goes to a nudist resort in Orlando to visit their grandparents. However, they had no idea grandparents were nudist. The mother remembers her parents being very conservative growing up, so she is shocked when she gets there and sees her own mom buck naked.

The general idea is that the grandmother doesn't do email very well and she neglected to mention that it's a nudist resort. They are in Orlando at the height of tourist season and the few hotels that are available are too expensive, so they end up staying there.

That's the general premise, and I was going to use it to showcase the kinds of things that seem common at nudist resorts, but there was no 'predicament' embedded in that story, and that's where I lost interest about chapter four or five. I could post that one if anyone wants to read bits?

Is there an idea forum?