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Why post the whole story again? Just post your comment.

Yes, sorry, it was my fault. I'm sorry! I have edited it


Thank you, and it's okay. i think i did the same thing, at one point as well, as i didn't realise i was quoting the entire chapter of a story.

So it's all good, and i appreciate ...

The dares should be fun to see.

Great story and I like the idea of strip penalties. The icing on the cake was when the girls showed up and took pictures of the naked boy, front and back!

My comments are not about disliking the story, just how the structure of writing could be better.

There are no paragraph breaks to separate different actions.
Multiple quotes from different characters are on the same line of script.
It all makes your story more difficult to read than it could be.

Glad that you were inspired by my story.

i like what you did with it.

It's a fun read, and you should keep posting stories, but maybe take on a bit of the constructive criticism below, as it will help you become better at writing, and more people will enjoy your stories.

Like others have said ...

I really like this idea. Fynn needs to get his comeuppance in a future chapter.

Finally the pain had subsided.

Two weeks after getting out of hospital following a knee operation Tommy was starting to feel better.

Tommy was 18 years old, 6 foot and a lean but muscular 185 pounds. A very successful youth and amateur boxer, Tommy had offers to go professional but had decided on ...

Hello.

My name is Nico and I’m pretty new here.

Believe it or not, as a kid and a teen, I experienced a couple of ENM moments that make for an ENM biography.

I can say without a doubt that ever since my first experience each consecutive experience was no less embarrassing, yet became ever more ...

These are all of the things I witnessed in the 8th grade. These are just the stories from my time in school.
These are all kind of quick and rapid fire.
The first was just an example of really bad luck. In between classes, walking down the hall and I see this guy jumping up and down, don't know ...

When I was 14, my Mom took me to our pediatrician's office for a routine physical exam. Mom remained in the waiting room (fortunately) while I was ushered into one of the exam rooms. As expected, a nurse followed me in and told me to "take everything off but your underwear." She left, closing the ...