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by Revengedpirate
Fri Mar 19, 2021 11:09 pm
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Re: Amy’s Life... Part Three B

Matt was 18, and drove a dark green Chrysler PT cruiser. Matt hated it because it drove like a pig. He only kept it because Nikki was into it. He honked his horn once he got outside Nikki’s and Nikki came out of the house.

Nikki looked stunning, her hair was shiny, her nails were painted pink, her ...
by Revengedpirate
Sat Mar 20, 2021 1:14 am
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Re: Amy’s Life... Part Three C

“Here you are Amy. I’ll just take your first bag.” Said Mrs Bājin.

Mrs Bājin passed me a second bag and I passed her the first bag.

“See you in a minute.” Said Mrs Bājin.

I dreaded this. I put my hand in and pulled out the second set.

“Oh my god it’s getting worse.” I thought.

This set was ...
by Revengedpirate
Sun Mar 21, 2021 1:12 pm
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Re: Amy’s Life... Part Three D

Meanwhile, a sand lizard, called Greta, was crawling across the sand. It slowly made its way across the dunes before suddenly Greta fell down a great big man made hole.

The hole was extremely deep, and Greta landed on her feet. She started to crawl across the sand, before walking on soft skin and ...
by Revengedpirate
Wed Mar 24, 2021 5:06 pm
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Re: Amy’s Life... Part Three E

“Here you are Amy, you’re next bag.” Said Mrs Bājin.

Amy reluctantly gave the swimsuit to Mrs Bājin and took the next bag. Mrs Bājin shut the door behind her. Amy carefully looked inside the bag she was given.

“Oh god no.” Said Amy out loud.

Amy pulled out a nightie. A flimsy My little pony ...
by Revengedpirate
Sat Mar 27, 2021 2:20 am
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Re: sarah the shy exhibitionist First attempt at a story-criticism welcome.

With Sarah I may of started with.

Sarah, was a shy, quiet girl. She had long brown hair that came down to her waist. Her two piece bikini was baby pink. Her breasts were double D, and the bikini was double knotted. Sarah occasionally liked to show off, but her shy side stopped her.

Sarah felt the ...
by Revengedpirate
Tue Mar 30, 2021 8:18 pm
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Re: Amy’s Life... Part Three F

“Right Girls, I’ve done as best as I can, to get the marker off your faces.” Said the girls mum.

“Show me, Mary.” Said Nikki.

Mary took another photo to show Nikki.

“Well I suppose it’s not come off too bad. But what am I going to do with my hair? It’s a mess.” Said Nikki.

“And mine?” Said ...
by Revengedpirate
Mon Apr 05, 2021 12:47 am
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Re: sarah the shy exhibitionist First attempt at a story-criticism welcome.

I wouldn’t worry about using a phone to write. I do all my stories on phone. Sometimes I do add Ons using my laptop but the 99% majority of my stories are written using my phone.

Based on your story, your writing is improving, the more stories you write the more techniques you will gain. Learning ...
by Revengedpirate
Thu Apr 08, 2021 6:44 pm
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Re: Amy’s Life... Part One (Part Three F Available Now)

There will be more from Amy, I’m loving this set of characters. I’m taking my time to write it so I don’t lose enf material and at the same time making the story plausible to real life. I like to take my time in humiliating characters and there are so many opportunities with these characters I’ve ...
by Revengedpirate
Thu Apr 08, 2021 8:48 pm
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Re: Amy’s Life... Part Three G

Matt, drove the two girls, to their appointment. Whilst he and Dave sat in the shopping centre restaurant checking out the hot girls that kept passing their table.

After the guys ate they then picked up the two girls who had their hair fixed with extensions and wigs, which would cover the damage ...
by Revengedpirate
Wed Apr 14, 2021 1:04 pm
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Re: Amy’s Life... Part Four

SUNDAY JULY 31ST 2016

Amy, after her humiliating day, the day before, decided to spend the day, in her room watching films and reading books.

Nikki, was so embarrassed by her short hair, didn’t do much either. The highlight of Nikki’s day was Matt coming over and having an argument with her about ...