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Re: Christine, Tiffany and Ginelle

Posted: Thu Oct 24, 2019 2:36 pm
by ENFfanatic
I really enjoyed this story, though you should probably write down who the main character is a bit earlier. It changes the reading experience a lot if you don't know if the babysitter is male of female . It also helps a bit with the immersion if you briefly explain what everyone looks like at the start.

All in all a good read.

PS. I believe it's called a tawse. I had no idea what it was, and the spelling error made that a bit more interesting to find out:)

Re: Christine, Tiffany and Ginelle

Posted: Fri Oct 25, 2019 12:20 am
by PhilMarlowe
No matter what you left out, it is a good story.

Please keep going.

Phil

Re: Christine, Tiffany and Ginelle

Posted: Mon Oct 28, 2019 9:38 pm
by stupd
Nice story!