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NudeBaG wrote: Sat Mar 22, 2025 11:43 pm My only critique:
Maggie is 12?
Yet she talks like a VERY sexually experienced woman, well beyond Alex’s 15.
I can appreciate she may have more experience than she lets on, but for a 12 year old to have that kind of cadence…?
Perhaps she really has had quite a bit of hands on experience.
Perhaps she learned to talk that way from seeing a lot of porn.
Or… perhaps there’s something metaphysical going on… an opportunity to take the story in a strange direction.
I don’t want this to come off as a slight to your writing, which is fantastic!
It’s just difficult to hear a 12 year old speak so eloquently and be SO sexually knowledgeable
Still hot though

Jeepman89 wrote: Sun Mar 23, 2025 12:05 am Maggie is very spunky, however. I like spunk!

NudeBaG wrote: Sun Mar 23, 2025 12:03 am thank you for being so gracious
It legitimately wasn’t written as a critique.
This is YOUR story, do with it what you will.
I was just pointing out that without explanation, Maddie’s dialogue is uncharacteristic of a 12 year old.
That’s all.

SeeEffenem wrote: Sun Mar 23, 2025 12:06 am

NudeBaG wrote: Sun Mar 23, 2025 12:03 am thank you for being so gracious
It legitimately wasn’t written as a critique.
This is YOUR story, do with it what you will.
I was just pointing out that without explanation, Maddie’s dialogue is uncharacteristic of a 12 year old.
That’s all.

You were right though, and I'm glad you called it out early, otherwise I might have gotten really frustrated later on. Truly and genuienly I appreciate it! I made a quick few little tweaks here and there. I've gotta invoke my inner child here and remember how she should talk lol. Lemme know if you think I'm back on the mark! This is the first story I've ever posted, so criticisms are very much appreciated actually

SeeEffenem wrote: Sun Mar 23, 2025 12:10 am Now here's something I want to get settled sooner than later! It's my story and all, and I'll definitely mold it how I want. But!

What is the board's general consensus on CMNM, and the involvement of other guys in ENM? Should Alex's dad make an appearance, and act as an enforcer? "Do what your mother/sister says." Or, should he conveniently be on a business trip? I'd like to at least know what most people would enjoy seeing

Uhh, maybe consider this an indirect poll. 'Thank Me' for this comment if you'd want to see *some* amount of that. Either way, comment and let me know as well.