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Re: Sharing a Changing Cubicle at the Pool (Part 11 -14 Feb)
Posted: Sat Feb 15, 2025 4:23 am
by steam train
Re: Sharing a Changing Cubicle at the Pool (Part 11 -14 Feb)
Posted: Sat Feb 15, 2025 8:21 am
by NudeBaG
“Ew!” exclaimed Hannah, pressing herself further back against the cubicle wall and wrinkling her nose as she looked at the mess staining the door. “That’s so gross!”
Hadn’t Hannah and her friend been trying to see naked boys in the pool earlier?
So she didn’t really know what a boy’s penis and balls looked like other than little Chris?
Obviously, she likes looking at naked boys, (or at least TRYING to look at them) but I guess she didn’t know what a boy’s orgasm would look like?
These aren’t criticisms (I hope thats obvious
) I’m just trying to further understand the character
Also, we witnessed Mia take Cam’s swimsuit, but what DID Hannah do with his clothes?
Seems Cam is still in for further potential embarrassment
Re: Sharing a Changing Cubicle at the Pool (Part 11 -14 Feb)
Posted: Sat Feb 15, 2025 12:43 pm
by BareB4U
Yeah, I thought this chapter would go down well with one person in particular!
NudeBaG wrote: Fri Feb 14, 2025 9:45 pm
I am SO SORRY for doubting Cam and maybe showing disappointment
I had to knock Cam down before I built him back up again. I think it's obvious now why I didn't dare comment between these two chapters.
NudeBaG wrote: Fri Feb 14, 2025 9:45 pm
And I don’t think we’re quite done yet, are we?
Not quite. Everything was building towards Part 11, but there's a few things I still want to wrap up before I'm willing to let go of this story.
NudeBaG wrote: Fri Feb 14, 2025 9:45 pm
One more serious note:
I WILL be using this as a masturbation story, there’s no way I can’t now
I thought you already were!
NudeBaG wrote: Sat Feb 15, 2025 8:21 am
Hadn’t Hannah and her friend been trying to see naked boys in the pool earlier?
So she didn’t really know what a boy’s penis and balls looked like other than little Chris?
Obviously, she likes looking at naked boys, (or at least TRYING to look at them) but I guess she didn’t know what a boy’s orgasm would look like?
These aren’t criticisms (I hope thats obvious
) I’m just trying to further understand the character
Hannah isn't quite as grown up as the other girls. She's still on the cusp between a childish belief that all boys are gross and that adolescent realisation that, actually, there's something much more interesting about them. She's not completely naïve, but she certainly wasn't prepared to see a boy ejaculating right in front of her.
Also, she's never going to pass up a chance to show disgust at her stepbrother.
Re: Sharing a Changing Cubicle at the Pool (Part 11 -14 Feb)
Posted: Sat Feb 15, 2025 12:55 pm
by BareB4U
This chapter was the hardest (pun intended) to write so far. It went through multiple iterations before I felt it was in a fit state to be posted. There was a tamer version, which felt like it didn't really live up to all the build-up from the previous chapters. There was a more extreme version, which felt excessively cruel in places and robbed the characters of too much of their innocence. Obviously this is personal preference, some of you will probably have preferred it if I'd leant more in one direction or the other. But I'm as happy with where it ended up as I'm ever likely to be.
One thing which never changed was that, despite everyone's obsession (including his own) with the size of Cameron's dick, and despite his body being obviously immature in some ways, he turned out to be fairly normal-sized down there after all. I always wanted that obsession to be more about all of the characters' biases and insecurities rather than the physical reality.
Re: Sharing a Changing Cubicle at the Pool (Part 11 -14 Feb)
Posted: Sat Feb 15, 2025 1:09 pm
by NudeBaG
Got it!
Thank you!
Whew!
Like I said, anything after what just happened is just most likely shameful indulgence
( on my end anyway)
I don’t foresee Cam regaining any significant cover (or dignity) anytime soon (outside of the fact that he and Ellie are pretty much official.)
He proved to be much more ‘mature’ than Mia had hoped, and Hannah now OFFICIALLY knows what EVERYTHING he has and can do looks like
Cam (seemingly) has nothing left to lose.
But the girls still have quite a bit to lose if they aren’t careful
Cam too, probably, if he continues being careless.
And what about Natalie?
I’ll shut up now
Re: Sharing a Changing Cubicle at the Pool (Part 11 -14 Feb)
Posted: Sat Feb 15, 2025 5:52 pm
by JustHere10
BareB4U wrote: Sat Feb 15, 2025 12:55 pm
This chapter was the hardest (pun intended) to write so far. It went through multiple iterations before I felt it was in a fit state to be posted. There was a tamer version, which felt like it didn't really live up to all the build-up from the previous chapters. There was a more extreme version, which felt excessively cruel in places and robbed the characters of too much of their innocence. Obviously this is personal preference, some of you will probably have preferred it if I'd leant more in one direction or the other. But I'm as happy with where it ended up as I'm ever likely to be.
One thing which never changed was that, despite everyone's obsession (including his own) with the size of Cameron's dick, and despite his body being obviously immature in some ways, he turned out to be fairly normal-sized down there after all. I always wanted that obsession to be more about all of the characters' biases and insecurities rather than the physical reality.
This is why I find your writing so fascinating. Personally I think you landed perfectly on the side of not too extreme since their still kids but not too tamed since there was this build up of some very very embarrassing things to occur. I'm so hooked and thank you again for your writing!!!
Re: Sharing a Changing Cubicle at the Pool (Part 11 -14 Feb)
Posted: Sat Feb 15, 2025 8:43 pm
by TeenFan
The last chapter is the perfect balancing act between cruelty and compassion.
Well done. And I am glad to see Cameron isn't small down there after all.
Now what about those itty bitty titties of Hannah?
Some payback is only fair.
Re: Sharing a Changing Cubicle at the Pool (Part 11 -14 Feb)
Posted: Sat Feb 15, 2025 9:57 pm
by steam train
TeenFan wrote: Sat Feb 15, 2025 8:43 pm
Now what about those itty bitty titties of Hannah?
Some payback is only fair.
… and in one of the early chapters Cam tormented Hannah about being bald …
I am also intrigued how Natalie will fit into the wider plot. The author obviously had a plan otherwise she would not have been introduced.
Re: Sharing a Changing Cubicle at the Pool (Part 11 -14 Feb)
Posted: Sat Feb 15, 2025 10:54 pm
by NudeBaG
steam train wrote: Sat Feb 15, 2025 9:57 pm
TeenFan wrote: Sat Feb 15, 2025 8:43 pm
Now what about those itty bitty titties of Hannah?
Some payback is only fair.
… and in one of the early chapters Cam tormented Hannah about being bald …
I am also intrigued how Natalie will fit into the wider plot. The author obviously had a plan otherwise she would not have been introduced.
I’ll just repeat my own comment here
Cam (seemingly) has nothing left to lose.
But the girls still have quite a bit to lose if they aren’t careful
Cam too, probably, if he continues being careless.
And what about Natalie?
Re: Sharing a Changing Cubicle at the Pool (Part 11 -14 Feb)
Posted: Sun Feb 16, 2025 3:07 pm
by NudeBaG
Jeez!
Just realized…
Turns out that the girls missing out on seeing Cam’s genitals upon Mia’s initial pantsing of him in the splash pool was probably the best thing that could have happened to Cam
Imagine if that’s ALL any of them got to see
But by prolonging the exposure in the cubicle in an attempt to humiliate him completely, it (kind of) worked out better for Cam (and Ellie)
At least now, even if Mia and Hannah deny it, and even if Mia has photographic evidence of Cam flaccid, they all know the truth
Brilliant story!
I’m excited to see how much more humiliation you can squeeze out of the remaining time limit.
Supposing Cam and Hannah had enough time left to JUST change and leave, I wonder how much longer they can all stay in the cubicle?
Cam’s window for revenge/salvaging of any dignity is probably pretty small now
) I’m just trying to further understand the character 
