You did say you were interested in peoples thoughts, it turns out I had quite a few
I am actually in the process of re-reading this and editing it a little bit, mainly just splitting up the conversations. In normal written English when the person speaking changes you start a new paragraph. It cuts out all the "she said", "he said", and makes it a bit easier to follow. If you are interested I will send you my results when I am finished.
While doing this a few key moments in the story really stand out for me. The first is their differing reactions to the French film when they were 10. Robert basically noticed the very harsh humiliation and punishment in passing, as a plot point, but gave it no further thought. In contrast, for Heather, it was a very important scene and moment of "oh, that could be done". You are clear in the story that this didn't mark the start of her interests, and that is quite clear, since she has been showing early signs for quite some time now. But instead of just going "that was powerful" and moving on, she feels safe and secure enough in her friendship to actually ask for help in recreating the scene and finding out how it felt! That level of trust and closeness is quite amazing, it feels really loving, "adult" in a sense.
More than that though is Robert both promising that he would keep everything secret, but also going along, supporting her, but not pressuring her. She has placed herself naked, for the first time, in front of him, exposed, in public, on show, stretched out, and even with his clear natural curiosity and desire to look he doesn't. This "small" detail is one of those moments that really matters to me, since it speaks to the depth of trust and safety that they have between themselves.
Heather has basically offered herself up, recreating the scene of being offered up specifically to be on show, but he doesn't just take advantage, he takes his lead and guidance from her, from his friend, the friend he wants to be comfortable and happy!
The next moment that really stands out is when the training bra appears, and Robert's simple acceptance that Heather being topless or showing off has come to and end. Again, so happy to simply accept his friend exactly as she is and wants to be, and that this can and will change with time! The level of acceptance and trust is simply heart melting
The next magical moment was them sleeping out in the back garden in the tent, when Robert suggested she goes for a naked walk around the neighbourhood. This marks the first time he has taken a more active role in all of this, moving beyond passively supporting her desires and interests and being fully behind her. As such it is a stand out moment, even if what actually happened is small and minor, it marks a major step in their relationship. It is also interesting to read how they just have no sexual desire towards each other, even as they find each other visually pleasing and appealing. I suspect this is down to their long history, they are so used to being friends that to step beyond that feels like a strange and alien step. On the first read through I did wonder how this would work out, since they are starting to be so in sync.
Next up is when the adult magazines enter the story. At first this is just an "event", and what makes me smile is the different reactions. Robert is much more interested in the pictures while Heather is much more interested in the articles, such a "classic" division, but still it makes me smile
Beyond that though, instead of running off into fantasy land with this they actually end up reading and paying close attention to some rather sensible articles, and approaching power exchange in a remarkably sensible and adult manor! A signal she wants to play, and a safe word! Plus being aware and concerned about the effect all of this could have on their friendship! This is really nice to see, it gives me warm happy feelings to see it being approached so sensibly and carefully, plus tingles for all of the fun that this idea holds in store!
My mouth fell open in amazed happiness when just after they start playing Robert explains why she is going to be punished! We have just had the entire story where they are so clearly equals, he has never taken advantage or suggested that he is better than she is, yet suddenly it is like a switch has been flipped. So calmly punishing her to remind her of her place in relation to him... it is such a massive change in their relationship, but at the very same time it isn't, since all of it is built on Robert accepting this side of Heather, accepting that there are things she wants and enjoys, and supporting her in this. This is just another way of accepting and supporting her, a level of acceptance and support that is just amazing, and makes me feel warm happy romantic feelings inside
These are wonderful moments, plus seeing such a strong and self aware character being punished because that is what they want and needs is hot, to
Seriously, how good were these articles? For the first punishment Robert is playing computer games, almost ignoring her, while being very aware of what is going on... bloody brilliant!
Having the first time she watches Robert masturbate being because he is about to feed her his cum on the cookies was quite eye opening, it is an interesting reminder that he quite likes being more shy around her, but also a very clear sign of the growing sexual tension at work here between these two. It also brilliantly achieves the emotions and feelings that she wants and desires from this game, and I feel proves rather well that it isn't just her that is so interested in all of these games
I will admit that I am unsure about the thumb up her bottom being sucked punishment, it just seems unsanitary and unsettling. It certainly does a job of being a punishment though, but all in all a mental image I am not to keen to dwell on all in all.
Then we run out of cookies... its another one of those "oh wow" moments. By default I would be tempted to assume the drive here came from Robert wanting sexual release, but the story is quite clear, the bigger issue is not disappointing Heather, not denying her her daily dose of cum! Then learning that we are moving on to blow jobs, but the two of you have never kissed, even though you are already planning for the day you will give each other your virginity... wow! It all just makes sense and is wonderful, but also quite surprising, which just increases the impact and makes this more fun!
Then everyone at school being sure they are just friends, while they are getting more "sex" than probably any number of their fellows put together, it just really makes me giggle. At the same time, the orgasm ration of 5 to 1 for him and her also reinforces their dynamic, the roles that they feel natural and comfortable in.
Making Heather keep her pussy hair, its almost "subtle", but for all of that it is really powerful, a comment on power, control, and who is in charge of her body! It just says so much in such a "small" way, really good!
Their different reputations at school really make me smile, her being the "slut" and him being the "secret sex god", all the while the really important stuff is just totally secret from everyone! Really puts a smile on my face.
It's a small detail, but the fact that Heather is the instigator of her own punishments does a lot to make this seem more "reasonable". There is no suggestion, no hint of him abusing her or taking control, since she is the one who pushes and indicates what sorts of things she wants, while making sure not to actually be in charge. A very good and healthy state as far as I am concerned.
Taking control of her bathroom breaks and watching her pee is an interesting development, and I like that you mostly focus on the emotional and control aspects here. The additional control over her, the exposure and humiliation potential make what could be a bit gross actually sexy and wicked fun
As for half dressed in the movie theatre, yes, positive reinforcement works well, and Heather certainly knows how to reward her "master" for a job well done
Walking naked in the nature reserve, what happens if someone appears? Well, you will be embarrassed won't you! LOL, brilliant!
Discovering that both of them have been avoiding play when she is on her period, that makes me giggle, just since it is one of those completely natural "well everyone knows that" moments where people get things wrong
Playing with her on her period, this shows why I like this story so much, you wonderfully balance being supportive, caring, ruthless and terrible all at once! Heather is exposed, punished, yet not punished for having a period, only for keeping it a secret. Inventive evil!
Of course Heather was the only one who said yes to having the trainee doctor come in on the exam
Extra humiliation and exposure for free, who could say no to that?
That is an interesting definition of the perfect man, but everyone has different standards, which is the whole point here after all!
Again the differences in their natures shine through, with her preferring the slutty sexual position and him preferring something rather more romantic
For all of his amazing wickedness, they clearly care for each other and understand and respect each other so very much!
On to college, and the planning to make sure Denny is going to be receptive to being included... given you have labelled yourselves as non exclusive boyfriend and girlfriend this all screams wicked fun is coming down the line!
And there we go, you get as far as giving Danny a handjob, and are already planning the fun of having two dicks to keep you happy! This is definitely going to be fun! Just have to make sure that Denny will respect you properly, but all the signs are good so far.
What is so amusing about you being put on time out for Denny to find is the way that the naked and bound woman is clearly in full and complete control of events, while Danny feels like a poor innocent being thrown right into the deep end, which he really is. Still, the fact that his natural instincts are so polite and cautious is what we want to see here, this marks him as a good candidate to be involved in these games with them