Re: Executionus Complete Story Archive
Posted: Fri Mar 15, 2024 9:31 am
I really enjoyed your story The Passion of Jessica Christ. One matter to consider, should you ever choose to return to the story, is the distinction between "Lady" and "Dame". A woman who marries a "knight" is referred to as a "lady". Women of independent achievement in the British system are elevated to the title "Dame".
For example,
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Judi_Dench
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Helen_Mirren
I'd also consider altering the name "Joel", though I know why you've used it And perhaps editing out the reference to Johnny Depp, which hasn't aged well. I also seem to recall that Jessica's classmate isn't described before he makes his big appearance in the play.
It's a timeless classic of this genre! Well done!
For example,
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Judi_Dench
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Helen_Mirren
I'd also consider altering the name "Joel", though I know why you've used it And perhaps editing out the reference to Johnny Depp, which hasn't aged well. I also seem to recall that Jessica's classmate isn't described before he makes his big appearance in the play.
It's a timeless classic of this genre! Well done!