Lilly’s Punishment Part 3
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Lilly’s Punishment Part 3
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Re: Lilly’s Punishment Part 3
One bit of feedback is that you should keep the whole story in a single thread instead of starting new threads for every part. It's more convenient that way both for the readers and for the organization of the board itself.
A second bit of feedback is that there are a large number of typos. You've been posting these very quickly, so it will probably benefit you to slow down a little bit and proofread more.
Aside from those issues the story is fairly well done and works surprisingly well with the high pace, since it conveys Lilly's own experience with feeling like she is on a runaway train. It is definitely far more extreme than most stories on here though, and is more of a molestation/non-con story as opposed to strictly an ENF story. The abuse levels are far too high for my own enjoyment, but many others are fans of that type of content.
A second bit of feedback is that there are a large number of typos. You've been posting these very quickly, so it will probably benefit you to slow down a little bit and proofread more.
Aside from those issues the story is fairly well done and works surprisingly well with the high pace, since it conveys Lilly's own experience with feeling like she is on a runaway train. It is definitely far more extreme than most stories on here though, and is more of a molestation/non-con story as opposed to strictly an ENF story. The abuse levels are far too high for my own enjoyment, but many others are fans of that type of content.
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Re: Lilly’s Punishment Part 3
I hope this can keep going, you're very great at writing loving this story ❤
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Re: Lilly’s Punishment Part 3
Am I the only one feeling queasy about this story?
This is a rape fantasy, where a young girl is serially abused.
This isn't humiliation, it's verging on torture. Lily speaks about the pain she's in.
This clearly isn't my scene.
This is a rape fantasy, where a young girl is serially abused.
This isn't humiliation, it's verging on torture. Lily speaks about the pain she's in.
This clearly isn't my scene.
Re: Lilly’s Punishment Part 3
Yeah I don’t rate rape fantasy
It’s not really ENF
OP: get some therapy
It’s not really ENF
OP: get some therapy
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Re: Lilly’s Punishment Part 3
Hey dude, it seems you didn't notice the pinned post on the top of the forum, if your story contains any extreme material in it, put that in the title, now since you removed the post I won't do it for you, but consider this your first strike.
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