
Reporting Live From Pinebrook Middle School! (Ch. 3 - 4/14/2025)
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Re: Reporting Live From Pinebrook Middle School! (Ch. 3 - 4/14/2025)
So! This installment wound up being waaaay longer than intended. But since this story is going to be a much slower burn than Little Sister’s Anatomy Lesson - so I felt like I needed to focus a lot more on dialogue, and generally building tension. That said, if i missed any glaring issues, or if you just wanna give some feedback on the direction or my approach, as always feel free to drop a comment 

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Re: Reporting Live From Pinebrook Middle School! (Ch. 3 - 4/14/2025)
This is great!
Love the cup play!
Unlike standard boxers or briefs, there’s no telling what might be going on behind the hard plastic shield!
Hopefully, Suzie gets to see what’s behind the cup
Love the cup play!
Unlike standard boxers or briefs, there’s no telling what might be going on behind the hard plastic shield!
Hopefully, Suzie gets to see what’s behind the cup
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Re: Reporting Live From Pinebrook Middle School! (Ch. 3 - 4/14/2025)
So, Suzie interviews 15-year-old Aiden Braxton while he is wearing only a skimpy shirt and a jock strap including a protective cup. Then the unfortunate Aiden has his photograph featured along with Suzie's subsequent newspaper story. Truly embarrassing for Aiden! I wonder if Aiden will be the talk of the school when the story is published?
This is a really superb story.
This is a really superb story.

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Re: Reporting Live From Pinebrook Middle School! (Ch. 3 - 4/14/2025)
This is turning into another favorite
Suzie is fantastic, and deserves to see everything!
That should make her reporting VERY thorough

Suzie is fantastic, and deserves to see everything!
That should make her reporting VERY thorough
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Re: Reporting Live From Pinebrook Middle School! (Ch. 3 - 4/14/2025)
Fantastic!
I was hoping we'd get some one on one interviews to really intensify the embarrassment of the boy that had been cornered by Suzie and that's exactly what we got. I really hope we get to see more like this, I thought you captured the character of Aiden brilliantly. His reaction to the whole thing felt very realistic, he was embarrassed and could hardly contain his anger but he knew he had to comply. And of course he got excited when Suzie "tested" his cup
I really loved the slow burn nature of this by the way. I hope that continues as things escalate.
I was hoping we'd get some one on one interviews to really intensify the embarrassment of the boy that had been cornered by Suzie and that's exactly what we got. I really hope we get to see more like this, I thought you captured the character of Aiden brilliantly. His reaction to the whole thing felt very realistic, he was embarrassed and could hardly contain his anger but he knew he had to comply. And of course he got excited when Suzie "tested" his cup

I really loved the slow burn nature of this by the way. I hope that continues as things escalate.
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Re: Reporting Live From Pinebrook Middle School! (Ch. 3 - 4/14/2025)
As a literary exercise, I'd like to issue a challenge to a skilled and accomplished writer: would they consider reversing the genders in this scenario? A well-crafted story could be developed around a shy male protagonist, presented in the first person, who finds himself thrust into a situation where the genders are reversed. Perhaps Suzie's success inadvertently sets off a chain of events that forces a male reporter to be embedded with one of the female teams?
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