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[EddieDavidson]

Due to the actions of trolls "Somebody" and "Fixitman" to run off authors with constant negativity, I am done contributing.

They are still posting to this page as if they have won some great victory by running off an author. That's how sad and pathetic their lives have become.

[EddieDavidson]

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[student]

This story has an intriguing premise--a family member is working out the rules for a nude household. Thanks for sharing.

[EddieDavidson]

You must literally drink ink, that you could have read it that fast.

Thanks, where would you take it?

There are many directions it could go. I was inspired to think that it could somehow end up with nude wrestling involved, rather than my often BDSM fetish related stories, but I am not good at writing action inspired ideas.

[SixPathsKeyblader]

Interesting beginning. I'm definitely interested in seeing where this goes.

[EddieDavidson]

Many times I begin with a skeleton of an outline and allow the characters some freedom to guide me so that I do not get bored writing because I know the outcome.

I want the same white knuckle ride as the reader of wondering where it will go.

In this case, as I finished Mary Christmas, I was reflecting upon what I really wanted to write when I wrote that. This has no Christmas component to it.
(Although, I suppose in retrospect, it could).

I thought about who would tell the story - perhaps Sydney, along with her motivations. I thought about the brother telling it, and how relatable his observations might be to anyone who was that age and had those same feelings. I briefly considered a third person omniscient narrator but those stories do not interest me as much because I cannot feel as rooted in the story and identify with the character telling the story as much.

I think I chose well in Trent.

I imagined his surprise seeing his sister nude for the first time, and how interesting it would be in a "Embaressed Nude Female" story to begin with a character who is not embarrassed - at least not yet!!

She invites him in. The trope might be "Get out of here you little perv, I AM NAKED!"

I wanted to flip that, with her seemingly unaware when she invited him, and him wondering if it's a trick, or if she just took a shower and forgot, etc. I thought the uncertainty would be fun tension in the early part.

The interesting premise of her family's nude rules, is a bit over the top. I need to come up with a plausible reason for acceptance, or perhaps take it in a different direction entirely with only the two of them starting the trend.

However, I've not written this one, no outline at all.

Instead, I am reflecting upon reader feedback. An interactive opportunity to some extent. I can't promise i'd take it, but I'd love to hear where others would like it to go and why.

One thought that occurred to me, which may seem out of left field right now, is that I would like to involve nude wrestling - with Trent training his sister to take on all comers.

I've been trying to broaden my scope as an author. As I read the remarkable stories on this site, I have been trying to "Get back to basics" of what makes a good story.

I have an old addage "BAD CHOICES MAKE GOOD STORIES"

Many of my stories are predicated on a character making a bad choice, that lands them in hot water. Case in point, Mary Christmas. She trusted Ethan, takes the dare, goes out in the snow - ends up with frozen panties tossed through the window to her that say "anal whore". Ditches those in the snow only to be caught by her parents who subsequently find the panties which further implicates her.

In this story, I may take the opposite route, and have them build a dynamic power exchange. However, one thing I am reluctant on is to add to many fetishes and scenarios involving copious amounts of sex.

One thing I like on this site, is many of the stories are far more subtle. They have sex and sexual escapades but they are not built around a fetish like my pony girl story - which I won't update any longer given there was limited to no interest. That's something I really need to think about before I introduce it into the story.

[student]

Trent is already in Sydney's room. What if naked Julia is waiting in the closet for Sydney to talk Trent into agreeing with the nude family rules, then spring out and the two girls strip their brother? That will be "wrestling naked."

Next, getting Harvey on board with the family becoming home nudists. Sydney and Julia could really prefer being naked--Sydney swore off underwear. BUT--in order to enjoy the freedom of nudism, the girls need to get the rest of the family to accept that Sydney and Julia won't be wearing clothes at home. What better way than to get everybody naked so that they won't complain? After the first week, set aside mandatory nude periods in the rules (such as during family meetings--with the excuse of not hiding anything) and mandatory clothes (Sydney may NOT take the trash out while naked) and the rest of the time it's clothing optional.

[EddieDavidson]

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[student]

Chapter Two is still blank? Do you have a copy of the Magnificent Seven so that you can review their recruiting? Chris was first--and suggested that the village hire men instead of guns. Here's a summary culled from Wikipedia:

"Chris finds five willing gunmen. They include Vin Tanner, a gunfighter gone broke from gambling; Chris' friend Harry Luck, who assumes Chris is hiding a much bigger reward for the work; the Irish Mexican Bernardo O'Reilly, who has fallen on hard times; Britt, an expert in both knife and gun who joins purely for the challenge involved; and the dapper, on-the-run gunman Lee, plagued by nightmares of fallen enemies and so haunted that he has lost his nerve for battle. On their way to the village, they are trailed by the hotheaded Chico, an aspiring gunfighter whose previous attempts to join Chris had been spurned. Impressed by his persistence, Chris allows him into the group."

You want something similar to the recruiting of the Magnificent Seven, and like Disney's Seven Dwarfs each gunfighter had a fully developed personality. Is Sydney your Chris, your Britt or your villagers? Harvey would be a great Harry Luck. Recruiting each member of the family one-by-one would make for fine chapters and give you a minimum of six chapters.

You started with Sydney recruiting Trent. Your Trent would want to establish limits--what new behavioral boundaries will everybody agree to? There are formal nudist resort rules and informal ones as well--Sydney mentioned towels. No need for Sydney to re-invent the wheel because there are already many examples:
https://www.mentalfloss.com/article/831 ... -etiquette

https://www.aanr.com/aanr-press-room/do ... st-resort/

Instead of having Trent negotiate or appear to be making demands, have him ask Sydney what the rules at nude recreation areas are--those rules are posted and the two links I provided are just a start. What would be appropriate for a family? Daily showers would seem appropriate for family nudists, but would that be upon returning home or early in the morning? There's a lot to discuss.

"Sydney, what are your goals? Do you really want to see everybody naked or is it just that you want to be naked and don't want the rest of us bothering you about that?"

[EthanSwift21]

I haven't read all the suggestions here, just the first chapter, but my suggestion is that the parents put Sydney to the test. They tell her that she, and only she, will be going naked and following the nude rules for an extended period of time, so that the rest of the family can observe her and decide if it's what they want to do.