Stripped to the Core 5D 11/30
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Yeah like other readers I have noticed some issues with using AI too, like some mention in the last chapter how she was bald before she was, and also it seems the AI is not smart enough to follow the path of the characters from one chapter to another, I love the concept and the ideas and the outline of your story, but like where did Madison go and how is she dealing with it all, and then in my own opinion skipping having Emma not go to cafeteria, and deal with being in front of all those students is major skipping point. I understand you wanted to skip towards getting ready for the assembly, I understand the assembly is going to be a huge point in the foundation of this first day, but skipping the cafeteria and bringing in all these new characters and by passing the cafeteria to me was a mistake, but you are the creator and it your vision for this story.
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""We’ve all been stripped by our parents in previous school years and written on by our classmates. We’re all part of Ms. Amberley’s little project.”""Danielle wrote: ↑Sun Nov 03, 2024 11:35 pm
Their bodies were bare, adorned with a chaotic tapestry of words and drawings, each mark a testament to their humiliations. All their hair from the forehead down was gone, yet they stood with an air of unshakeable confidence as if their vulnerability were armor.
“Hey, Emma,” a tall senior named Kiera called out, her voice dripping with a mixture of mockery and sympathy. “You’re not alone in this, you know.”
I took a hesitant step back, uncertainty coursing through me. “What do you mean?” I managed, my voice barely above a whisper. The embarrassment surged within me, hotter than the skin I felt exposed to, as I could already imagine the whispers that would follow me.
The other girls—Madison, Lena, and Zoe—dropped to their knees in front of Kiera, wrapping their arms around her waist in a show of solidarity that felt strangely choreographed. Even the guy, Ethan, followed suit, dropping to his knees with an exaggerated flourish. “What you see here,” Kiera continued, gesturing to her friends, “is what happens when you embrace the chaos. We’ve all been stripped by our parents in previous school years and written on by our classmates. We’re all part of Ms. Amberley’s little project.”
Madison smirked, her eyes glinting with a mix of pride and mischief. “Welcome to the club, Emma! It’s liberating.”
“Liberating?” I echoed, disbelief coating my words. “You mean it’s humiliating!” The laughter of passing students echoed in my ears, taunting me. I could feel their judgment like a physical weight pressing down on my shoulders, their eyes lingering on my clothes, my hair, my very being. How could they understand? How could they possibly see this as anything but mortifying?
Lena chimed in, her voice steady but filled with a teasing edge. “But it’s also a way to let go. Ms. Amberley told us we didn’t have a choice but to embrace it. It was all planned. The way you felt today, how you let someone write on your skin—it was all part of the show.”
A wave of anger mixed with confusion rose in my chest, flooding my cheeks with heat. “So this was all planned? Even the option to skip on someone else's clothes?” I felt my stomach churn at the thought, the embarrassment curling like a snake around my insides.
“Exactly!” Zoe exclaimed, her enthusiasm infectious despite the circumstances. “But honestly, who would want to skip? This is a chance to express ourselves. We’re creating art, even if it’s on each other’s bodies.” She flashed a smile that only made my heart race faster, caught between admiration and fear.
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“Trust me, this is just the beginning. We’re going to the stage back area before the last-period assembly. You’ll see—once we get in there, it’s like stepping into another world. You’ll forget all about this nonsense.”
Zoe chuckled softly, brushing her bare arm with her hand as if to emphasize her point. “That’s exactly what we all thought at first. But this is about more than just today. It’s about pushing boundaries. Ms. Amberley wants us to see the world differently—to see art in everything, even in ourselves.”
so that hints on what I said before in a comment this is is for the very long term, for the rest of her high school career, not just this year or this semester. This is the way of life for them.
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Re: Stripped to the Core 5A 11/03
Yesso that hints on what I said before in a comment this is is for the very long term, for the rest of her high school career, not just this year or this semester. This is the way of life for them.
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If this is just for the school year, why donate her clothes? Do they expect her to outgrow them in that time? What is she going to wear at the end of the school year when the project ends? This seems like it will last much longer than a single school year. If they are going to write on her, will they have to redo it every day after she takes a shower and washes it off? Even permanent marker eventually fades.
I am hooked, I look forward to reading more of the story.
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Re: Stripped to the Core New 10/22
When using blade razors, it can sting a bit afterward. Just ask any woman who has shaved their pubic region. The more sensitive the skin the more pronounced the "burn". A moisturizing lotion is a must in these areas.
When shaving a person's head an electric shaver is required, or a pair of sharp scissors. Electric shavers do buzz.
I agree about the mistakes A.I.s make as they are not true A.I.s. They are just well written intuitive software. They are incapable of learning from their mistakes.
I use chatGPT and venice.ai to assist with outlines and advice on things like elements of the story. The A.I.s are also great at describing elements I have no knowledge or experience with such as BDSM fetishes.
Using an A.I. to assist you in writing a story is no different than having another human as a sounding board for ideas. Just don't copy and paste the entire story from the A.I. How many people who give the A.I. credit for writing the story or claim it for themselves?
I want to thank the author for posting this story. I have enjoyed it greatly so far. I look forward to seeing the rest of it.
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I agree, there been more hints that has lead to this is for the long term, not just to the end of the school year, maybe for the rest of her school career though the rest of high school.Fixitman8267 wrote: ↑Wed Nov 20, 2024 3:47 amIf this is just for the school year, why donate her clothes? Do they expect her to outgrow them in that time? What is she going to wear at the end of the school year when the project ends? This seems like it will last much longer than a single school year. If they are going to write on her, will they have to redo it every day after she takes a shower and washes it off? Even permanent marker eventually fades.
I am hooked, I look forward to reading more of the story.
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If it is until graduation, I could understand donating her clothes. There is the chance she will have a growth spurt making the clothes useless anyway. There is also the change in fashion that will occur in the years before graduation.computerphoto wrote: ↑Wed Nov 20, 2024 2:50 pm
Previous quotes omitted to keep the posts more manageable and to prevent redundancy.
I agree, there been more hints that has lead to this is for the long term, not just to the end of the school year, maybe for the rest of her school career though the rest of high school.
Personally, I would like the project to be extended to the end of the school year. Then when she is hopeful about it ending and she can get dressed again, she will be approached by the principal, the president of the school board, her parents, the art teacher, and some local media. She will be shocked to hear they are extending the project at least until she graduates. I look forward to seeing where the author takes her journey.
This turns a simple NIS project into a NIS/NIP project. This reminds me of "The Volunteer" by DH Jonathan except for the writing. Her expectation of getting dressed then told she wasn't going to be allowed to reminds me of one of the stories in "The Unintentional Nudist" by various authors. I'm just glad that she isn't treated as badly as Tami Smithers was. Walking around naked with writing you your body is less traumatic.
Go to this site and scroll down to the unintentional nudist group and you will see all of the stories that I know of concerning Tami Smithers. The volunteer used to be available on writingsofleviticus and storiesonline but were taken down when he posted the book on Amazon.
https://allcmnf.thebeachclub-ii.net/vie ... ist#p11491
https://www.donnylaja.com/tami-smithers-stories
https://allcmnf.thebeachclub-ii.net/vie ... =47&t=2852
https://writingsofleviticus.grometsplaz ... gadoon.htm
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Please repost linkshttps://allcmnf.thebeachclub-ii.net/vie ... ist#p11491
https://www.donnylaja.com/tami-smithers-stories
https://allcmnf.thebeachclub-ii.net/vie ... =47&t=2852
https://writingsofleviticus.grometsplaz ... gadoon.htm
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Re: Stripped to the Core 5A 11/03
Danielle, will we be seeing more of your story Stripped to the Core? Not trying to rush you in any way but I was curious if more chapters are in the works. Your last couple of chapters were really fascinating. I hope you haven't given up on this story and I am sure I am not alone in thinking this way.
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