The Unraveling (New 11/08)

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I enjoyed this at first when it was more about nudity and exhibitionism. A little ENF is exciting, but this has gone way past that. Lilly and Riley have experienced way more humiliation and embarrassment than if they had allowed the original picture to be circulated. Now that have allowed themselves to be blackmailed into becoming little more than slaves. Aria, Ellie, and Claire need to be expelled and go to jail. Lilly and Riley need to take back control of their lives.

Don't get me wrong, my comments are not against Emily. She has done a great job writing this story. I know that if the pics and videos get posted the damage to their reputation will follow them for years but eventually people will move on to the next new porn or naked girl being humiliated and/or blackmailed. They will survive this as long as they end it. Unless they like being slaves.

Thank you for the honest feedback. I may be bringing this story to an end soon. It seems like overall feedback is that things have gotten too far for Riley, and that was never my intention. I’ll be thinking a bit more about the direction I want to take, but this story may be ending soon.

I don't think you should change any plans no matter what others think, the only thing that matters is your own vision and ideas of where you think the story is going, you can always change the story, if that is what you want to do, and if was real and if Riley wanted to report it she would have by now, but she keeps submitting so like I said the direction of the story is totally up to you. I would say just keep the story going since people have enjoyed it.

[Bucket]

I enjoyed this at first when it was more about nudity and exhibitionism. A little ENF is exciting, but this has gone way past that. Lilly and Riley have experienced way more humiliation and embarrassment than if they had allowed the original picture to be circulated. Now that have allowed themselves to be blackmailed into becoming little more than slaves. Aria, Ellie, and Claire need to be expelled and go to jail. Lilly and Riley need to take back control of their lives.

Don't get me wrong, my comments are not against Emily. She has done a great job writing this story. I know that if the pics and videos get posted the damage to their reputation will follow them for years but eventually people will move on to the next new porn or naked girl being humiliated and/or blackmailed. They will survive this as long as they end it. Unless they like being slaves.

Thank you for the honest feedback. I may be bringing this story to an end soon. It seems like overall feedback is that things have gotten too far for Riley, and that was never my intention. I’ll be thinking a bit more about the direction I want to take, but this story may be ending soon.

I don't think you should change any plans no matter what others think, the only thing that matters is your own vision and ideas of where you think the story is going, you can always change the story, if that is what you want to do, and if was real and if Riley wanted to report it she would have by now, but she keeps submitting so like I said the direction of the story is totally up to you. I would say just keep the story going since people have enjoyed it.

Agree whole-fucking-heartedly with every word.

[Hooked6]

I agree with Bucket. The story is marvelous so far and I would encourage you, Emily, to continue. In fact several of the last chapters were just plain wonderful!

I have always encouraged authors to write what pleases them and create as you feel appropriate. You can't write for or listen to a crowd of people directing your story. I find it always best when you can look at what your have created and are happy with with it.

Looking forward to many more chapters.

Hooked6

[shmeckle]

I also think you should keep writing the story you want and let it go where it wants to. I'm sure most of your readers would agree. I'm always looking forward to more.

[Emily]

Thank you all!

It’s nice to know there is still some interest in this story. Feedback goes a long way for me, so please keep that coming. As always, feel free to include any ideas or suggestions you have as well!

[Bucket]

You see, Emily.

We love and support your story BECAUSE of the directions you've taken. That's what makes it the best story around. And of course the way you write. I hope for many, many, and one more many for good measure, more chapters to come!

[neverdoubted]

Kudos to you for having captured the imagination of so many readers. I hope you continue writing and don't get discouraged by detractors. My only advice as a writer is to go a little easier on Riley's "racing heart". It races, pounds, and skips beats so often, I'm starting to worry the poor girl might have a heart defect!

As for the plot direction, write whatever you want. If you enjoy it, odds are others will too.
~ND

[emobat]

I love the story, and the escalation I think it's going perfectly building and expanding the humiliations.