Young Lady

[SensoryOverlord]

Oh this is lovely!

For some reason, it's reminding me of Ghibli's 'Whisper of the Heart.'

I wish I could do character interactions like yours. You're making me feel like I'm retarded as a writer. Aka intensely envious.

[IsaacLascar]

I'm really positively surprised. I like how you give the characters depth and don't immediately drift completely into pornography. This in itself makes the entire plot more meaningful and you get more involved with the characters. I liked how you let Marisa and Mr. Barlowe show different sides of their personalities and bring them to life as characters when they have remorse or question their actions and are conflicted with themselves.
I'm also curious how Riley wants to get revenge on Marisa. Will he torture Marisa and not just beat her ass? I'm personally a fan of orgasm denial , but that's your story.
And what does Leigh's role look like? Will she also be allowed to discipline Marisa or was she also naughty? And will Brad find out about the secret after all and get revenge on Marisa through blackmail and worse humiliation? So many possibilities! I'm really excited. Keep it up and I wish you lots of strength for the future chapters.

[SensoryOverlord]

I'm also curious how Riley wants to get revenge on Marisa. Will he torture Marisa and not just beat her ass? I'm personally a fan of orgasm denial , but that's your story.

I'm not sure it's revenge that Riley has in mind. Something more surprising and mature, I suspect.
Another fan of orgasm denial here. But is this story going to end with the end of the day? Too short to be feasible for org denial.

And what does Leigh's role look like? Will she also be allowed to discipline Marisa or was she also naughty?

I'm guessing Leigh's role involves getting stripped too. AND disciplining Marisa.

[Sue DeNym]

I'm grateful that people are interested enough in my story to be guessing where it's going. I don't want to give away the plotline in advance, but I like to drop hints. A number of people have picked up on the foreshadowing in the chapters I've posted so far.

In my original draft, when Mr. Barlowe was telling Marisa about Riley, he said :

"I'm sure that you and Riley would have much in common. He's an athlete, like yourself. In fact, he's an avid track runner, too."

After a while, I decided that that was too much of a giveaway that Riley would turn out to be the guy Marisa was talking about in Chapter 1, so I changed it to Mr. Barlowe simply saying Riley was a fair runner, although his main interests were basketball and soccer.

I'm working on the next chapter, but it might be a while before I can post it.

Anyway, everybody, thank you all very much for your kind words about the story. I'm happy you're enjoying it.

[Skylar21]

Oh my! what a way to end a chapter! At the hands of someone she insulted, and the imminent arrival of another who hates her, all the while naked and tied!

This is really taking shape.

As usual, your writing is wonderful and evocative. With much anticipation I await your next chapter.

[Revengedpirate]

Good story can’t wait for more

[LVB99]

Fun story so far, hope there's more to come?

[Josh M.]

Fun story so far, hope there's more to come?

I know that Susan is still working on Chapter 4 of this story.

I'm afraid that it's partly my fault that it's taking so long. Susan has been spending a lot of her time helping me with the stories I've been writing. This past month, we've been mostly working on Part II of our story, "Miss Lovelace Takes Charge."

Also, Susan is a real perfectionist, and sometimes it takes her a long while to figure out just the right way to convert her thoughts into a finished work. She knows how "Young Lady" is going to end, she's just trying to work out how to get it there.

I know how it's going to end, too, because I've seen Susan's notes for this story. Of course, I can't tell you the ending. What I can tell you is that she has compiled a LOT of material for it, and there is a lot more to come.

Susan is working on it.

[computerphoto]

Yeah I can't wait to see what happens to Marisa next and I think she was totally setup by her parents with this punishment, and setup by Henry too, Henry wanted to punish Marisa, and can't wait to see how far he will go in the punishment of her.

[Sue DeNym]

I very much appreciate all of the compliments and support I've received from everybody who likes my stories. I have received a number of e-mails and messages asking about the next chapter to "Young Lady," and I wanted to give an update on how well it's coming along.

The short answer ... It's not.

I've been working on Chapter 4 of this story whenever I have been able to find the time. It has been proving extremely difficult to write. At one point, I had written about half of the chapter, but then I decided that there was a problem with the plotline I'd sketched out, that I just couldn't work around. I wound up re-writing the plotline and starting the chapter over from the beginning. My second attempt to write this chapter faltered when I found another issue with the plotline, and had to go back and rethink it again.

This chapter is going to be somewhat different from what's come before. It is intended to explore the relationships between the main characters. Primarily, it will focus on the question ... Why was Marisa so mean to Riley that day at the track meet?

Chapter 4 will provide some insight into why Marisa behaves the way she does. It won't answer the question completely. There will be more to her backstory that will be revealed later, but we will get a good look into what makes Marisa tick.

"Did I offend you in some way?" asked Riley.
"How could you have?" Marisa folded her arms in front of her, her eyes downcast. "All you did was tell me that I ran a great race. How could anybody possibly be offended by that?"
Marisa looked tired, drained, sounded bitter.
"I don't know," said Riley after a moment.
"Neither do I," said Marisa quietly.
"Well, why don't you tell me about it, and maybe we can figure it out together," suggested Riley lightly.
"I'm not sure you'd understand." Marisa wrapped her arms around herself tightly. "Sometimes, I'm not sure I even understand."
"Try me," persisted Riley.
Marisa finally met the boy's gaze.
"Fine."

It's been difficult. The only thing I can promise is that I am doing my best to finish this chapter. Thank you, everybody. :)