Bucket wrote: ↑Fri Aug 23, 2024 6:55 pm
The only thing I'd like to see more of is for the pace of Mary exposure to be picked up a smidge, but that's just personal preference. You know, a bit slow burn, but with more and more peeks or perhaps extended looks at her nether regions.
Slow burn?! It's already day two of their vacation. You really in that much of a hurry for it to end?
Hell no I don't want this story to end any time soon. I hope there are many, many more chapters to come!
I just mean slow burn in terms of Mary's exposure. Don't take that as a criticism btw. It's not. It's worked so well so far and makes Mary's eventual and continual exposure that much more entertaining. As I say, I'm loving this story so far and hope you release plenty more chapters of Mary's misadventures soon.
The slow pace of her exposure can be singularly attributed to Mary's intense desire to preserve her modesty. Given where she started, literally yanked out of her shower and dragged on a family vacation still dripping wet, you have to give her credit for salvaging a slow burn out of such a dire predicament.
But she is still losing ground (trading her modesty away to Frankie one body part at a time certainly isn't helping matters). And if you're hoping for things to pick up, just wait until day three! At least right now, she still has the use of her hands
Slow burn?! It's already day two of their vacation. You really in that much of a hurry for it to end?
Hell no I don't want this story to end any time soon. I hope there are many, many more chapters to come!
I just mean slow burn in terms of Mary's exposure. Don't take that as a criticism btw. It's not. It's worked so well so far and makes Mary's eventual and continual exposure that much more entertaining. As I say, I'm loving this story so far and hope you release plenty more chapters of Mary's misadventures soon.
The slow pace of her exposure can be singularly attributed to Mary's intense desire to preserve her modesty. Given where she started, literally yanked out of her shower and dragged on a family vacation still dripping wet, you have to give her credit for salvaging a slow burn out of such a dire predicament.
But she is still losing ground (trading her modesty away to Frankie one body part at a time certainly isn't helping matters). And if you're hoping for things to pick up, just wait until day three! At least right now, she still has the use of her hands
No worries at all.
Like I say, I actually love and really appreciate the approach you've taken with Mary. It makes the pay off of gradual exposure so much sweeter. I also feel the need to reiterate just how much I like the approach you've taken with Mary's mental health. So many EMF stories' main characters don't act realistically disturbed by their situation beyond a bit of of embarrassment whereas Mary actually acts extremely distressed and extremely vulnerable all the time. I hope that's a continual theme.
Cerulean wrote: ↑Fri Mar 29, 2024 2:13 pm
I signed up for an account to tell you how much I’m enjoying this story. Please continue?
Wow, I love hearing this. Whenever meeting a new reader, I like to ask a survey question. Everyone else can reply as well. I don't know if you've read any of my other stories, but if so, which main character is your favorite?
1. Rachel, the girl who started it all
2. The always daring Lucy Jenkins
3. Poor, confused Caroline
4. Ashley Melliger, who still believes and Santa Clause
5. Mary Jane (anything but plain)
6. Someone else
Up to Chapter 5 so far ...
I'm not quite a new reader, and my interest in various story lines varies wildly. I like (1) Rachel (Thornwood) the best because she hits one of my sweet spots:
Are you sure it's OK to be naked?
I must sadly admit to not having kept up with your other works, except for Dare Me. And I am not a big fan of flashing/streaking.
Thank you for your insightful feedback. The reasons or causes for ENF run a wide gamut. You are correct that, while Thornwood and Dare Me do have some parallels, they are based on very different premises. Dare Me is generally more along the lines of streaking or thrill-seeking. But in Thornwood, Rachel gets pushed far beyond her comfort level while being told the entire time that it's all perfectly normal.
That's because the events of Thornwood actually occur within a greater story or universe of stories where one determined man (Bystander) has made it his life's work to change the world...one naked girl at a time. His investment in Thornwood is just one of his many schemes and among the first to really bear fruit. He wants the next generation to grow up believing that nudity (female nudity in particular) is the natural order of things. But that raises an interesting question. How much of human nature can really be controlled? If it is natural, why won't the blush on their cheeks or the lump in their throats go away? And what about the small voice of their consciences asking "are you sure" that never seems to fully go quiet?
Another story you might enjoy is "No Enemy but Time". While it's not exactly the same premise, it does feature a naked girl dealing with and questioning the natural order of things. I started posting it more recently, so it wasn't on this list.
One of the parts that I loved about the Thornwood story was very much that fact that factors outside of Rachel's control continued to push her. Whether they be authority figures she respects or even a scheme so large yet they remain in the "shadows".
The naivety is also perfect. She is in increasingly getting into situations where her mental and arousal is being tested. Does she ever think to say no? Does she ever think to speak up about what's happening? She thinks, but rarely does apart from a few times that get shut down quick. It keeps the excitement going. Just one time she could have said something and the whole thing could have failed, but she didn't and so it didn't. It's like she is on a tightrope. She can't really turn back because she has already done so much, but it's not really like she exactly wants to carry on, but she must. I mean she can take a "Mini-break".
It will make it's inevitable ending, however it turns out, that much sweeter. If I were to predict one thing that could happen in the ending, it would be that Rachel's pinnacle will at one point slip out in front of the crowd or will be pulled out by someone to display.
If there was one thing I'd have liked, it would have been some more appraisements, like how much poor Rachel has grown throughout the year? Pinnacle and as well as that her hair color and eye color. I'm not sure if I missed the mentioning of them. It's not necessary to the story of Thornwood, but I think it'd be nice.
All your stories are great, I love reading them all.
I actually ended up having a look yesterday, a proper look that is Lol, and managed to find it. I was looking for anything with "Thornwood" in it initially, but just had to look a bit harder. The story looks interesting and I'm a fan of the writer of course.
Thornwood book 1 is available to read, but The Prairie Settlers Project isn't. I take it that the Prairie Settlers is a prologue of sorts? Is it a must read before you read Thornwood? Or can you get away with just skipping to the Thornwood book 1?
So I don't think that story has been written yet and remains but an idea. Thornwood was written in 2011 so most of it is already completed but it's nice to see ND touch up the story and post it all in one place. I can't wait to see what the book cover will look like.
If you want to read prairie settlers you will have to vote for it.
So in summary, you can just read thornwood straight away with nothing else, when the other bystander stories come out I imagine the biggest connection between the stories will be bystander himself. Or an odd mention or two of some other characters. Depends how famous Rachel becomes world wide.
I hope there are many, many more chapters to come!
I hope there are many, many more chapters to come! 
