Daddy, Please Don't Sign It

[Corsayr]

This was so good

I was seriously embarrassed for her myself as it started to come into focus who she was to be paired with

Not knowing what is to come is such a powerful feeling when the story really sets up a deliciously horrible set of possibilities

I don't envy the task you set before yourself of rising to that occasion and writing the rest of this

2 suggestions if you'd like:

1. Set up the next chapter to give some breathing room to the main storyline by doing the assembly with Miss Monroe next. Perhaps maybe after the professor spanks her have a surprise for her and get some volunteers from the audience

2. As a side event that chapter have Jason talking to other boys in front of our heroine Kimberly have them asking him questions about owning her, eventually turning to questions about borrowing and leading to the discovery that because all the other girls have partners that care about them, they are shooting down even requests to watch some of the punishments. (I was thinking side event because maybe not actually do anything to Kimberly except make her hear it and try to protest) or maybe make it a chapter and have Jason let the other boys grope her a little or something small.

3 bonus thoughts have the Doc peace out claiming a prior engagement (but really it turns out to be an act, she doesn't believe, and it's for the money. If she has to strip once in a small group to sell it, so be it ) this might set up a payback scenario or maybe the principal can bring her to justice for an ending?

Thanks so far. This is quite the imagination fuel already

[SensoryOverlord]

A wonderful, intriguing story. I think the best element is Dr Corrigan, and the development of her psychology and philosophy, how the hell she has managed to pull this off. And how far she will be able to take it.

"Perhaps this requires a bit of explanation," said Dr. Corrigan

Yes indeed, it does. But this will be delicious I'm sure. I love stories where erotic situations that would seem completely impossible in real life, are somehow developed in the story as convincing and even feasible.

I'm guessing that Dr Corrigan is strongly exhibitionist, masochistic, and highly kinky. And has managed to construct a very erudite and well reasoned academic theoretical structure around her desires. So convincing that even the parents of the girls are won over to her ideas. With of course a degree of mutual kink from the various fathers. Plus this story also ties into present social issues - feminism gone way too far and is wrecking everything, time for men to take back authority, pendulum swinging back very hard, etc. Maybe that will be part of Dr Corrigan's explanation? Maybe... her ideas are actually sensible?

There's also the fascinating mystery of Jason and Kimberly. That they seem to have been added to the program in a somewhat separate manner, and Jason and Kimberly are NOT at all fond of each other, so the 'more or less slavery' aspect will be quite different in consequences for them. I'm guessing Dr Corrigan and others are fully aware of that. So Kimberly is intended to act as 'scout' in demonstrating whatever more severe ideas Dr Corrigan has about the ideals of male-female relationships. To facilitate their adoption by the others in the guardianship program.

Ha ha, perhaps after Dr Corrigan has led by example, in showing how ideally females should submit totally to every male sexual whim and desire? Her fantasies involve being a plaything for multiple teenage boys? With her coaching the boys in overcoming their inhibitions, taking on their socially rightful dominant role, most effective methods of 'managing' females via their sexual responses, erotic techniques, toys, spankings, edging, orgasm denial and overload, bondage, etc. She probably even has a textbook ready for this course. Have the parents seen this? Homework, graded assignments, practical exams, certificates of achievement, the whole academic she-bang.

Equally tantalising - where does Vice Principle Miss Monroe fit in? Does she have _any_ idea where this is going? A spanking bare in front of a school assembly? Excellent, and then what? It's over and she walks off stage? I doubt that!

Dr Corrigan would probably prefer something much more visual and erotically instructive, as backdrop for her own spanking. Something worthy in tone as an introduction to the guardianship (aka sexual slavery) program.

Well, that's just my ramblings. Where ever the story actually goes, I'm looking forward to it.

[Casanova]

Right up my alley.
Can't wait for more.

[Casanova]

Pity this was abandoned. But understandable.

To write an idea down is a huge task.
To maintain that is herculean.
To give a satisfying ending is nearly impossible.

[Sue DeNym]

Pity this was abandoned. But understandable.

Not abandoned. Just really difficult to find time to write these days.

I'm still working on this story, and I will get back to it. Hopefully, it won't be too much longer.

[SensoryOverlord]

I'm still working on this story, and I will get back to it. Hopefully, it won't be too much longer.

Ha ha, let me tell you where this leads. In 10 or 20 years you will have _dozens_ of unfinished stories.
So many that you forget what you originally intended with early stories. So if by some miracle you did find time and motivation to go back and try to finish an early story, you'll have to re-read the entire thing and make notes, figuring out where the plot was (probably) going, because you cannot remember and your early notes were spotty at best. And your writing style and possibly interests will have changed too, making continuity a real pain.

Old, very slack porn author speaking here.

[Sue DeNym]

Well, that's not very encouraging.

your early notes were spotty at best

It's funny you should say that. I am actually a really obsessive note-taker. That's part of my problem. Very often, when I do find time to write at all, I wind up spending so much time making notes and plans for a story that I run out of time before I actually get to writing the story itself.

I went through a dry spell this past year. For about 10 months or so, it seemed like every new month, I would say, "This month will be different. This month, I will begin submitting stories again." ... but it just never materialized. If it wasn't one thing, it was another.

Last month, I was very grateful to have finally posted something new, and I'm thankful for all of the kind words and support I've received from many people. I admit that, right now, I'm kind of focused on some new stories I'm writing, so it's difficult to find the time to resume writing my older stories, including this one. Also, whenever I pull up my notes on my previous stories, I find myself looking through a cumbersomely large amount of text, another reason how being such an obsessive note-taker sometimes works against me.

But I'm not giving up. I don't know when I might be able to resume this story, but I very much hope I will.

[SensoryOverlord]

To write an idea down is a huge task.
To maintain that is herculean.
To give a satisfying ending is nearly impossible.

Is this a quote from somewhere?
I couldn't find it, but the search sure did turn up some interesting stuff.

Relevant: the story of Ernest Hemingway's struggle to complete 'A Farewell to Arms.' This was Hemingway's first successful novel, that established him as a great writer. It's one of the recognised great works of English literature. First published in 1929. After Hemingway died and his journals became public, it was revealed that Hemingway had struggled greatly with the last couple of pages of that book. He'd encountered extreme difficulty in achieving an ending that satisfied him. Apparently he'd rewritten the last few pages over 50 times in the course of a year, trying to find a satisfactory form.
Bearing in mind this was before computers and text editors, hence written over and over BY HAND.
In the end he succeeded, and the work is incredibly moving, powerful.
The moral being, that in writing it's essential to be doggedly persistent - just keep trying! Never give up your ambitions!

I could appreciate that advice more, if I could get more of my stories even somewhere _near_ an ending.