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by Somebody
Sun Oct 20, 2024 4:25 am
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Re: Stripped to the Core

I must concur, both that it is a great story and that, from the moment I heard her long hair described, I thought this story should really involve her losing it. Maybe not all of it, but cut short so she can't cover herself with it at all. And of course, certain other hair might be hiding something...
by Somebody
Tue Oct 22, 2024 7:33 pm
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Re: Stripped to the Core New 10/22

Glad to see our suggestions used, but the AI program you're using really has kind of lost the plot, which happens to me when I try to use them too, especially around shaving. they don't seem to understand that you don't "shave someone's hair (on their head)" or feel the sting of metal. Raz...
by Somebody
Tue Dec 10, 2024 7:23 pm
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Re: Heather Plays Hockey [Ch8 Posted on 12/10/24] (trigger warning - underage nudity)

While we're criticizing, you don't need that trigger warning stuff. I'm sure most of us here are trying to pretend it's not 2024 and that is an unwelcome reminder. Great story by the way, quite unique
by Somebody
Wed Dec 11, 2024 8:08 pm
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Re: Heather Plays Hockey [Ch8 Posted on 12/10/24] (trigger warning - underage nudity)

Wait did you misunderstand? I didn't mean remove the content, i meant you don't need the warning. Like you said, it's common. And the other criticism was about tense consistency.