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Males might be able go unnoticed as their bathing suits are far enough down that water distortions and shadows in a clear pool might obscure their nudity for a while. A girl wearing a bikini just losing just the bottoms might go unnoticed for a while, but not in a one piece. MORE!!!

My best suggestion continue writing the story. Either they find out if it were right/wrong or it is irrelevant to the story, as some details tend to be.

Did that cookie have any special ingredients by any chance?

How about this??? She leaves her clothes on the ground, nobody actually touches them, and within full view of her, gusts of wind blow some/all of them into a mud puddle or something rendering them unwearable. The other girls ran back to the locker room before she started getting dressed rendering th...

It occured to me, even when I originally read the story a few years ago, in Chapter 4 the order he thinks would release Jenny from Karen's control, might not have been specific enough to do so. I would like to know if this was intentional, and ask if you intend to, beyond the spin-off, add more chap...

Ignoring that, all she would need to do is force one of Jenny's fingers out of her ears and crack the door open while Matt was giving the club its new instructions forcing Jenny to do anything that Karen says as long as it does not contradict something Matt instructs or has instructed. She could do ...

My point was that poorly worded instructions cause confusion/trouble multiple times in the story already. It would be in Karen's interest to obscure the fact she controls Jenny from Matt. Obviously you did not intend this to be the case, and you can make it not the case, but it can be interpreted th...

Now that you've got to this point I'd really like to know, specifically what adjustments/instructions s does Matt make/give in his few encounters with Abbie? (and other girls)

Ok as long as it actually gets revealed, its quite a rare Chekov's gun to have a mind controller as the sub-plot's main character. It's difficult to determine what is totally free will, "free will" based on limitations of instructions, and what the instructions are for any female who inter...

Author's note: I am not a fast or good, or motivated writer. I may not continue the story past this point. Anyone who wishes to have my blessing to do so. "Stop it!" Nancy hissed. "It's not funny, and for the last time, I don't have a crush on Mr. Johnson!" "Yeah right"...